User talk:Vulpa/My Second Fanfiction

Hello.

Hi... if you want to comment on my fanfiction, this is the place to do it. I basically put this here so that my link on the actual page wasn't red. So, let me know if you like it! --Vulpa 23:44, 29 August 2012 (UTC)

Hello its me again from your first book. I've got another "review" for your current book:

Firstoff so far I can't say to much about the book, because its still rather short (hope that changes because I rather liked your first one). But one thing That is imo rather important and which was missing in book one was humor. I found that rather sad because humor usually makes a book more fun to read and isn't to hard to implement. All you need is either an ironic (e.g. Tyrion from "A Game Of Thrones" or Malcom Reynolds from "Firefly"), a character with an overdone trait (e.g. the depressive Marvin from "A Hitchhikers Guide To The Galaxy" or the suicidal Kayal from "Tide Lords") or a totally mad character ( e.g. Pellys also from "Tide Lords").

WARNING POTENTIAL SPOILERS Also, in the plot summary you wrote that the new Sheogorath opens a time bubble to Skyrim. maybe I dind't read that right, but that sounded like someone else was made the new madgod. In the end of Oblivion you are the new Sheogorath/madgod so that wouldn't make much sense. The part with the "time bubbe" can be done a lot simpler by simply placing the main character Sïlvia in Tamriel when the gate closes. Dark eves have a long life span (up to 1000+ Years) so she could just live untill the events in Skyrim take place.

Thats all, I hope this fanfiction is done soon because I'm really looking forward to it. Hellspawn (talk) 15:47, 13 November 2012 (GMT)

Hi again! Hopefully you saw my response on the first fanfic.... Anyway, thank you for your review! I appreciate the feedback, and hope you'll read this one when it's finished. However, this one (as I'm sure you can tell) is still in VERY early stages. At least, for now-- I'm starting work on it again. As for your suggestion, I like the idea or overdone trait/irony: I think I'll use that, thanks! (BTW I loved Marvin) And about the "mad character"... I'll certainly be using that as well, multiple ones in fact, as this takes place mainly in the Shivering Isles. I already have some ideas. ;P Yeah, in the little note-to-myself at the bottom, I must have mistyped because I mean the main character becomes the "new" Madgod. As for longevity, Sílva is a Bosmer. I looked it up, and nobody seems to know how long they can live-- hence, the time-relativity thing.

Thanks again for your input-- I look forward to finishing this now to see what you think!  :) --Vulpa 00:07, 14 November 2012 (GMT)

Yes I read your first reply, love your pictures that you added to the story btw. And I must have misread her being a dunmer. But I do believe all mer have a long lifespan, since they all evolved from the aldmer, but I'm not 100% sure. I really hope this story is done soon bacuse it sounds awesome, and there's so much you can do with a crazy god :)Hellspawn (talk) 08:54, 14 November 2012 (GMT)